Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

It's common to hear some discussions about the best way for teaching children, are those that defend that kids need to go to
school
e others in
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to educate them at home. I personally believe that,
besides
the fact that
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advantages in both methods, go to
school
is still the better option. Teaching a child at home can be a great choice for parents that
doesn't
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work or have time enough to monitor the child's evolution, add teachings that the
school
wouldn't do, giving special attention and
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guarantee
guaranteed
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his safety.
On the other hand
, go to
school
provides a place with the
infraestructure
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infrastructure

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necessary for all the academic activities,
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teachers with
k
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nowledge and the best methods of teaching.
Besides
that, the opportunity to be in touch with others students is extremely important for the child's development, to play and exchange experiences, learning about collaboration and how to work in a team, there are all necessary abilities for both academic and personal
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lives
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lifes
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, especially in the
firts
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years. In conclusion, both options have many advantages, but in my opinion
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go to
school
is better for the kid's development.
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