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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

It's common to hear some discussions about the best way for teaching children, are those that defend that kids need to go to
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 e others in
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 to educate them at home. I personally believe that,
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 advantages in both methods, go to
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 is still the better option. Teaching a child at home can be a great choice for parents that
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 work or have time enough to monitor the child's evolution, add teachings that the
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 wouldn't do, giving special attention and
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guarantee
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 his safety.
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, go to
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 provides a place with the
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infrastructure
 necessary for all the academic activities,
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professional
 teachers with
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nowledge and the best methods of teaching.
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 that, the opportunity to be in touch with others students is extremely important for the child's development, to play and exchange experiences, learning about collaboration and how to work in a team, there are all necessary abilities for both academic and personal
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lives
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, especially in the
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first
 years. In conclusion, both options have many advantages, but in my opinion
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go to
school
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 is better for the kid's development.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized learning
  • cater
  • flexible schedule
  • extracurricular activities
  • safe learning environment
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • socialization
  • diversity awareness
  • structured environment
  • discipline
  • punctuality
  • resources and facilities
  • communication skills
  • teamwork
  • specialized subjects
  • experts
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