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Some people think that all TV entertainment programs should educate people about the importance of social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is true that the role of TV programs in transmitting knowledge about social issues to the public is a controversial topic for many years. While I agree that educating individuals about social problems remotely brings substantial benefits, I believe that not all entertained shows should contain information about recent difficulties. On the one hand, I agree that providing details about problems of the community to citizens through TV programs is advantageous for several interpretations.
To begin
 with, comedy shows is likely to accompany with realistic and friendly circumstances which may not require superior intelligence to understand,
thus
 entertaining items are able to approach viewers considerably easier compared to other types of media and more residents can acknowledge issues of the public.
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ublic about the role of communal challenges, results in the increase of contribution into regional development.
On the other hand
, I believe that it is redundant to integrate educational contents into every program.
Firstly
, the original and main purpose of entertainment programs is to relieve watchers from stress and anxiety after working hours. In fact, consuming a large amount of brain energy in understanding theoretical and complicated concepts
such
 as current crisis that are implied might lead to the exhaustion of residents,
hence
 not only their mental conditions cannot be alleviated, but
also
 their productivities are reduced significantly in the following days.
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For instance
, National Geographic or CBC and VTV are TV programs that display information about challenges of the public,
thus
 it can be duplicated and worthless for comedy to repeat these described details. In conclusion, while I agree that teaching individuals about current difficulties have positive effects, I do not believe that social contents should
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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