Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times. They don’t want their children to read any entertainment books because they think it is were of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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a growing number of parents that reading books for fun is a waste of time and they force their children to real only educational-related books.I completely disagree with
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point of view,because in my opinion,youngs can gain lots of information by reading different kinds of books ,and
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it helps them to enjoy their time and meet one of the basic human needs. Reading every
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of books is essential for all children in order to broaden their horizon in different aspects of life.If parents do not let their children
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attain their general knowledge about different topics by reading different kinds of sources ,they will grow up one dimensional which will affect their future.In
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other word,a successful person with limited
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will face
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of problems in his personal life.
For example
,statistics show that the majority of
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people
(around 70%), who has lots of achievements and devote their lives only to study,are unsuccessful in other aspects of their lives.
Therefore
,I believe that families should not only let their children to follow their interests,but
also
encourage them to read books in
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wide variety of topics. From
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sychological point of view,all people have the need
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entertaining which is a primary need of human being and meeting it is vital for mental health.To clarify more,if children’s parents forbid them to spend the specific amount of time on what gives them
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real joy,it will disturb their psych which will result in lots of mental illness.
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this
part of their lives,they will even reduce the chance of prosperity in their future career lives.
As a result
,it’s important for students not to care only about their school books and try to follow the books which they enjoy
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reading. To conclude,parents should stop pushing their children to study only their educational books due to the drawbacks which
this
action has.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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