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Some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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A wide range of people believes that giving
homework
 to children every day is necessary because it can enhance their achievement at school and be successful whilst others have an opinion that they should not be given tasks every day. In my opinion, both sides have their impacts.
First
 of all, childhood is the stage where children should have to explore themselves with many kinds of fascinating activities which can help them to learn from their environment.
This
 step is the
time
 for children to play freely without getting stress and too much pressure because it can disturb their emotional and psychological development. Too much
homework
 will reduce children's
time
 to play and enjoy their moment with their mates which is crucial for them to build interaction and learn problem-solving through social activities with their friends. Children who only know about how to finish their
homework
 will lose the opportunity for making friends and their memories about childhood will less happy.
On the other hand
, freedom to play does not always mean children should not be given quiz at all. Tasks from school are still necessary to motivate and remind children to study at home. By giving them
homework
, children will memorize and remind their lesson from school and it is important to enhance their academic development. In the future, they will need good marks on their transcript to attain a better job and work opportunity and it can be obtained by extra
time
 to study at home. But, the number of tasks need to be adjusted so that children can finish them without getting exhausted and still have enough
time
 to enjoy their
time
 with their friends.
Finally
,
although
homework
 should be provided for children, they still need enough
time
 to feel their childhood so that the tasks should not be given every day.
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