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People should choose their course of study not on the basis of their own interests, but based on the kinds of jobs they can get. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that choosing a proper
course
 is one of the crucial actions to have a prosperous future. Some people think that they should select the
course
 that enables them to work in demanded jobs, not following their
interest
. Since, there are factors as well-being and a willing, playing a significant role
on
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 creating a successful career, I disagree with
this
 view.
Firstly
, students should study the
course
 they are interested in
,
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 since it has a direct impact on well-being.
Moreover
, many occupations may attract students with well-paid salaries, and high standards of privileges,
however
, unpleasant jobs might become boring after a particular period, due to
unexistance
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existence
nonexistence
inexistence
 of
interest
. In
this
 case, they would like to go outside the box
,
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 and look for
such
 an exciting job that they would be ready to work for free in order to take
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pleasure.
Consequently
, they may waste their valuable time studying unnecessary subjects, which could be spent on obtaining fundamental experience of their scale of
interest
.
Secondly
, there should be a strong will that always pushes young people to learn more and perform better. Regular jobs that force them to work to earn a particular amount of money to cover living expenses might be limited by their poor performance. Obviously,
this
 two-sided unprofitable situation can be fixed by students through breaking the limits with
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uge
interest
 in learning. In conclusion, people should not be distracted by
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onetary benefits of employment, while choosing the courses.
Instead
, they must keep progressing and discover new abilities by a significant involvement
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 studying the
course
 they feel a strong
interest
, to have a successful long term career.
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