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Some people think that you can learn about the culture of different places by travelling to them. Other people think that you can learn just as much as about these places from reading books and watching travel documentaries about them. Discuss both the view and give your opinion. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Travelling refreshes soul, while it is important to travel to places to and acquire
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irst-hand experience, some
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, it can be achieved with the help of Books and Videos. While I agree with the earlier view, the essay will discuss both the views in detail.
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, Visiting can never match watching, in one of the instance, Kailash mandir(biggest single stone sculpture in
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orld) of Ellora cave based in India is printed on 20
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(currency) note but when someone visits the huge rock, he can understand how
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 ordinary cut stone can be so captivating yet so simple. While, excursion to the place person can understand learn most about language, customs and its values.
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, It is not always possible to travel to places due to several factors, financial, time availability and access to
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 experiences of creators which can give deep insight to daily intricacies of
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 caves were invaded in 17th century Mughals. In my opinion, It is utmost necessary to travel to the location and enjoy its scenic beauty rather than learning from someone else’s view as the author of the book and creator of the documentaries is living the experience, while
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udience is just enjoying it from far. To summarise, Sources might be able to teach an individual about language and heritage, it is important to make it
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 out of learning, enjoying the beauty, exploring new horizons and creating memories. It is just like swimming, without jumping in the pool and making mistakes, learning is incomplete.
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