Some teachers think that international students exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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trend among teenagers . While some educators think that it is advantageous , others
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out certain disadvantages . But in my opinion
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the merits are definitely worthy than the few negatives .
To begin
with, international student exchanges proves to be an advanced platform of
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. A student can acquire knowledge from any part of the globe and get to know the world better
besides
the textbooks or the course of study .
For instance
, when a handful of students from
U
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S are privileged for
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they will be able to learn something more on life
such
as
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culture , traditions , customs and lifestyle of the citizens. They can apply some morals
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orm them in their lives and can build up their social skills .
Moreover
, when the young citizens are out of their comfort zone they start to learn
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without leaning on someone else's shoulder.
In addition
, they
also
can have a pretty big friendship circle from other nationalities
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. Talking about the demerits ,
this
opportunity can lead young teens to some traps or mistakes because of their tender age . They can
also
cheat their conscience and turn towards bad companies as they are free from the supervision of adults. And during the initial days of 'transplantation', they may
also
experience several difficulties of moving out of their comfort zone .
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to sum up , in my opinion , for students , even though moving out from their locality in
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young age is full of barriers , it is always colour full to explore the world with their own wings .
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