The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land in sea ? What are the reasons and solutions.

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happening around every corner of the world. The animal species are disappearing in forest, zoo and ocean because of experimental of the technologies and scarcity of living lands for human. There are several steps which would help to stop the extinction of valuable spices and animals. To commence up with the possible causes behind why happening these kinds of activities by
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humans.
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ee just a poster or model statues of animals in the museum and zoo. On the other side, For prevention of present animal creatures, The government should require to place up Law and Order in
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onstitution, which would be strictly
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for hunting and killing activities.
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ago. To recapitulate, The animals have their own life and family, they deserve
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separate isolated space to live their life, away from the interaction with human
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