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Today, more and more people choose to be self-employed. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh itsdisadvantages?

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Nowadays, the amount of people working on freelance jobs is increasing. I tend to believe that the benefits of self-employment are outweighing the drawbacks of it. The main drawback of working as an independent worker is an unstable annual income. Working only on temporary jobs, self-employed workers do not have long term profit resources and they can experience the risk of a financial crisis. With increasing demands and highly competitive terms of labour market
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it can be very challenging for freelancers to land a job.
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, long term employees can gain profound experience by climbing the career ladder,
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, improving their positions in the company’s hierarchy which is something freelancers can not do.
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, another negative side of freelance jobs is not getting needed health insurance from companies which is not the case for permanent workers.
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 once they retire, independent workers don’t get a pension which puts them under the poverty risk on the old age.
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 self-employment has some drawbacks, I tend to believe that benefits are more important.
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 and foremost, freelancers have the freedom every office worker can imagine. Thanks to odds
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 as having flexible work schedules and not being tied down to an office environment, freelancers can travel the world and choose when and where to work.
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, self-employees can achieve a better work-life by changing workplaces if they gain no job satisfaction from their current projects. By working for several organisations, they can earn more profit and have enough money to fund themselves in the long run. In conclusion, working as a self-employee has more benefits than disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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