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society is based on rules and laws it could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It cannot be denied that rules and laws are an integral part of
society
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 .which provide safety to individuals in every Nation .a segment of
society
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 believes that, some rules and laws are against their freedom I opine that legislation is very crucial in the country. I will discuss point before reach the conclusion.
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 with, law and rules are made with the help of
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 people for better safety there are a number of rules and regulations that protect people from the detrimental situations
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 as crossing the read lights, deforestation, factories not allowed between the city, these laws are very helpful which made by the government
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, during the driving if people will not follow rad lights rules
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 it will cause the accident that will lead to death .
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,if the government had not made a rule against the deforestation that could be dreadful for the environment.as people can easily cut down the trees for their benefit
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 as making furniture, burning stove and for other purposes. if rules will not be in
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 individuals can easily cause harm to others as people will knew that they will misdeed anything there is no law that will punish them for their mistake.
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 sometimes during serious fight individuals can easily kill others for the reason that nobody could send them in prison .
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, some people think that
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 some rules are not needed to for a long time,
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, if the government make a rule and laws for a short time period that will not be better for run the
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. citizen has to right to raise their voice .whenever, they find any regulation that needs modification . in conclusion rules and laws are a must so people should follow the rules and laws as per their country.
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