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Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, while others think that it can be harmful for children. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children doing paid work?

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There are different views as to whether paying children for doing
work
 is a positive or
a
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negative trend. While
this
 tendency
lead
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 to some benefits, it has certain negative sides. There are two major drawbacks of children doing paid
work
.
First
, when they earn
money
 from completing tasks they learn to be motivated by
money
.
For example
, It
lead
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 them being not interested in performing
work
 for the sake of it but for
money
 and they can grow into
money
-oriented adults in the future and lose motivation for the
work
 if there is no earning promised in the end.
Second
, putting
money
first
 and helping others
second
 young people gain materialistic habits,
therefore
 become less interested in being socially active and helping others without
money
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 reward. Children doing gainful works has a number of advantages which are important. Earning
money
 from the young age educate children about productivity which can be regarded as one of the benefits. Meaning that
,
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 children encourage them to be more interested
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performing tasks as they know they are going to be rewarded in the end.
Furthermore
, carrying out paid
work
 has a benefit of preparing children for their future
work
 life, in the sense that youngsters understand the relationship between hard
work
 and earning
money
, thereby become more diligent people. To sum up, paying children for their
work
 leads to some positive changes
such
 as
,
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 having an understanding
on
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 hard
work
 and reward relation, become motivated by that and by doing so be more productive.
However
, there are some negative factors as well,
such
 as being only
money oriented
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,
therefore
 losing their will on carrying out their social obligations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • beneficial
  • harmful
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • financial independence
  • responsibility
  • valuable skills
  • impact
  • education
  • exploitation
  • negative effects
  • social life
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