Some people think that children should obey rules or do what their parents and teachers want them to do, but others think that children controlled too much cannot deal with problems well by themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people claim that it is necessary for youngsters to abide what their teachers and parents tell them to do, others believe that if children are being controlled too much, they will not have enough ability to solve problems that they might face in
life
. From my point of view, I agree with both statements. On the one hand, I think it is the young people’s responsibilities to follow the adult’s rules and command.
Firstly
, most parents and teachers are the people who have much more experiences and knowledge than the young generation as they are older and have been dealing with numerous problems in all walks of
life
.
Therefore
, the children who want to become good citizens must follow the seniors’ footstep, which
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obeying the teachers and parents’ lessons and advice in daily
life
and at school.
Secondly
, parents and teachers are the
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who
nurture
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and take care
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the children, so in order to show respect to them, children must not disobey the adult.
On the other hand
, I
also
argue that youngsters manipulated strictly by parents and teachers can lead to a bad consequence. When children are being over-controlled by parents, they do not have
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hance to pursue their interest.
As a result
, they might have bad attitudes and become aggressive dealing with problems by themselves whenever they find the problems are difficult to tackle.
Besides
, over-reliance on parents and teachers can lead to
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lack of confidence in children.
Thus
, they are not able to solve well the issues that they might face in daily
life
and at school. From the above analysis, I think that the young generation should obey their seniors,
however
, the parents and teachers must not strictly
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everything especially children’s private
life
.
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