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wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Staying happily in any situation from the heart is called real happiness. As it is generally seen that everyone is busy with making more and more money in their
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, having good bank balance does not lead to happiness. Whilst it tends to be a luxurious
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, I believe that there are other factors that are contributed to achieving real joy in
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 and nobody can buy family love, affection with money. Taking care of parents, children and love ones' is all about the bonding between all members of a family. Money could be a source to buy some of the necessities, it can not help to develop love among all family members. It can be achieved by spending time with near ones, which can not be possible with wealth.
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. Satisfaction could be taken from the activities
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