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All fathers should be entitled to time-off from work when their children are born. To what extent do you agree?

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New families face a lot of difficulties along the way. There are discussions about whether all fathers should take
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 from work or just in some special occasions. I tend to believe that paternity
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-off is as important as maternity. In the following essay, I will be explaining my point of view.
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 of all, postpartum can be really challenging for new parents. It is a hard
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 both physically and emotionally,
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 is essential for them to take a
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 to process all
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 wave of new information. A recent study has compared the postpartum effects. In one hand, there were the young families which the fathers could be at home in the
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 month. In the other hand, there were the families which the fathers could not miss any day of work. The results showed that the levels of baby blues and postpartum depression on
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women
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womens
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 were incredible higher on the absent father's group.
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, it is really important for a young baby to have close contact with her
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parents. The benefits of the bond created on the
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 phase of the aby's life will have echo effects during his whole life. A data recently released, explained that those fathers who had more
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 with their newborn, developed a stronger relationship with them.
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, they were able to perform several tasks, like skin-to-skin contact, changing diapers, putting the baby to sleep that easy up a bit the load on the mother's shoulders. To conclude, as I explained above having a
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 away from work after a newborn child arrives at home, promotes great benefits for all parts involved.
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