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Some people believe that professional like doctors and engineers , should be required to work in the country where they training .Other believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish . discuss both side and give your opinion .

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Nowadays several countries have regulations that forbid people getting a job in a different place than they did their studies, these laws argue for a return on investment and forbid freedom of choice. The question behind
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 whether regulations are restricting the improvement of
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. In
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 essay, I shall discuss both points of view.
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 countries invest resources in education
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 their budget to get trained
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 who will be able to respond to the requirements of the profession
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 they are trained to benefit their country. Every country has its reality about what jobs in critical sectors should be covered by
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 governments address the education laws to ensure the services are adequately provided to the population.
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, sectors like healthcare, engineering and education are critical to the development of society.
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, what about the freedom of choice, everyone should have the freedom to choose where they want to work
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 with that experience will reach better opportunities professionally.
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 allowing
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 to work in different countries provides them with interchange knowledge, skills and best practices letting
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 adapt to the needs of the standard of quality in the world. Undoubtedly it is essential to respect the right of people to choose where they want to work, allowing
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 liberty provides them benefits
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 as increasing their skills and a variety of knowledge from different realities which would be to achieve without the opportunity to get a job in another country.
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Expansion of Examples
Expand your examples by providing more specific scenarios or real-world case studies to illustrate your points further.
Strengthen Conclusion
Consider adding a stronger personal opinion or a more defined conclusion to effectively wrap up your discussion.
Sentence Variety and Transitions
Work on varying your sentence structures and incorporating transitional phrases for smoother flow between sections.
Balanced Argument
Effective discussion of both viewpoints on the issue.
Effective Introduction and Conclusion
Good use of introductory and concluding paragraphs to frame your essay.
Logical Structure
Logical structure with clear main points supporting each side of the argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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