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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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In the recent world, the number of travellers who tend to visit places with extreme conditions is increasing every day, be it a desert having scorching heat or an ice-cold mountain.
However
 , these thrilling activities have some pros and cons and
this
 essay will discuss them in detail. (very good start) To begin with, visiting regions where conditions are difficult to travel are usually done for adventure and it surely has some advantages. Primarily, it gives a sense of achievement to people and c creates happiness.
Also
 , they are able to see places which are unexplored yet.
Hence
 , they enjoy the beauty of mother nature at fullest. For example, in the north of Pakistan, few of the hikers explored a running stream of water,
however
 , they had to hike a steep mountain for eight hours in order to reach their destination.
As a result
 , now that place is a major tourist destination for local and international tourists and the government has
also
 made a track to reach there.
Therefore
 , the major benefit of travelling to lands with hard conditions is the exploring of virgin places.
On the contrary
 , planning a trip to places where basic infrastructure is not available, is not advisable for everyone. The major disadvantage is the unavailability/unavailability of decent living space which can cause serious fatigue.
As a result
 , an individual will be tired and might get sick.
For instance
 , recently in Nepal, a mountain hiker lost his life due to heart failure as
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mbulance was unable to reach because of bad road condition.
Moreover
 ,Living a temporary place makes tourists vulnerable to the attack of wild animals as well.
Hence
 , commuting to places with extreme conditions a life-risking activity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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