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Some people believe that excessive use of modern technologies, such as computers and smartphones, is negatively affecting the reading and writing skills of our young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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New technologies provide both advantages and disadvantages. While some people believe that the intense
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 of these modern technologies,
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 as computers and smartphones, may affect negatively the writing and reading skills of youngsters, others believe that these technologies do not cause any problems related to these skills. In my opinion, excessive
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 of these technologies is prejudicial both to writing and reading ability.
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, it is common to see in some new technologies wrong spelling of the words.
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inadequate learning of the words.
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, a lot of young people,
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 of using the right spelling of the words when using smartphones, generally
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 a contraction or abbreviation.
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, when they have to write using the right forme, they do not know due to the constant
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 of wrong spelling.
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, excessive
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 of anything may be prejudicial.
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 smartphones and computers probably can affect negatively writing and reading ability of young people.
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, youngers are less interested in good readings
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 as a newspaper or book.
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 may be due to the uncontrolled
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 of new technologies. The lack of reading caused by these new trends definitely affect writing and reading skills.
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 is because they are not exposed anymore to complex and well-developed text.
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, they are avoiding readings that effectively build strong writing and reading skill. In conclusion, new technologies may be affecting negatively both writing and reading skills of young people. Not only they are getting used to wrong spelling of words, but
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 they are less exposed to good contents that truly develop these skills.
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