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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Lately, there has been an increase in the number of people who prefer to read
e books
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instead
 of paper books. In my opinion
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I believe, that the benefits of
read
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 electronic books outweigh its drawback. On one hand, I acknowledge that
e books
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 provide by some disadvantage. It
is require
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 us concentrated long time
in
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 a screen so they may cause eye strain and many problems.
such
 as
,
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 back pain,
nick
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 pain, and vision problems in early age. On the
others
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 hand, despite the downsides to electronic books, I believe the advantages to preferred reading
e books
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 are stronger.
Firstly
, people can read books easily at any time from the device.
For instance
,
every one
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 can download the book from
I
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nternet and save it
in
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 their phone.
Secondly
, the space required for storage
e books
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ebooks
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 is very small compared with paper books.
For example
, the printing books need huge space at home like
l
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ibrary to store
it
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.
By contrast
, the electronic books can they are storage it in the CD or USB.
Lastly
, everyone can buy
e books
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ebooks
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 online and directly saved it but when they buy paper books, will wait many days to collect it. To conclude,
although
 electronic books provide by some drawbacks. I think have more merit that made people more accepted it because they
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 a time.
Moreover
, when can be home more organizer and useful from space. Nowadays the world
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 protected screen to protect people from vision problems.
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