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It is sad that life is becoming increasingly stressful for most people. What is the reason of this phenomenon and how could this problem be solved?

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It is generally seen that most of the people are living their lives in stress and it could be happened because of various things. More
time
 management and more pressurising jobs can be the reasons behind it.
Although
 it is really
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orst situation for ones'
life
, it could be solved by spending
time
 with family and by avoiding long hours
job
.
This
 essay will highlight these causes along with possible solutions.
To begin
 with,
time
 is very important to manage in everyone's
life
 and it could be a cause of stressful living style. Work-activity balance is very important and it should be followed by all working people. If they will fail to distribute their moment efficiently among their duties and family,
then
 they will face stress on their mind.
Also
, these days almost all the jobs are very demanding and to fulfil those responsibilities, it is must pay attention to every single movement or change in that
job
. A stressful
job
 could be a major reason for the troubles in an individual's
life
. As he/she will no longer to take care of the family as well as not get space for himself/herself.
Moreover
, the two main steps, which can be proved beneficial in order to seek out
this
 problem are spending more
time
 with the love ones and avoiding long hours shift. Staying more
time
 with the children and partner will give a chance to share the feelings and tensions with near ones, which will help to feel light. Cutting some hours from the daily shifts will allow them to spend
time
 for oneself and enjoy the beauty of
life
 so that one can feel relaxed and free from all the duties. To conclude,
this
 essay explained the two main causes difficult
job
 and
time
 mismanagement with a few possible solutions as giving more
time
 to family and avoiding long shifts. No doubt, it is increasing day-by-day, with these steps it could be controlled to some extend.
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