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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Health-related problems become increasingly common among certain societies. In some part of world junk
food
 is becoming the biggest reason behind many of
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ealth-related issues of a huge portion of mankind.
However
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entre ought to put high taxes on these fast
food
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This
 essay will discuss why it entirely necessary to charge more taxes on
this
food
. People prefer to eat junk
food
 because it
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tasty and easily available . People start getting bored so easily from homemade
food
 .
In addition
 , Taste buds of human encourage him to go outside for street
food
 to eat something new each and every day.
For example
 , In Sydney , there is
food
 market which sells more than sixty-two cultural
food
 from Indian
food
 to Mexican
food
 which encourages people to come each and every day to eat different dishes from all around the world of various flavours . Imposing a higher
tax
 on outside
food
 help to reduce the daily street
food
 intake . Additional
tax
 put the strain on people budget .
Moreover
, It is often seen that hiking the price of anything stops an individual to buy .
For instance
 , Germany government to reduce the health issue like obesity increase the taxes on fast
food
 and after that numbers were amazing within one year number of patient suffering from obesity-related problems reduce by twelve per cent .
Thus
 Imposing higher
tax
 will help to stop people going on a daily basis for outside
food
. In conclusion,
this
 essay discussed that street
food
 is a major reason behind many of health-related issues and it is completely necessary to impose a high
tax
 on junk
food
 to reduce the burden of the health care sector.
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