In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As a say goes: "Everyone will old." Nowadays ,the

population

is ageing rapidly and

this

leading to an unsustainble increase the public

healthcare

ocst.

Although

this

is a bad trend for the world, we shouldn't let the

population

pay for their

healthcare

provision in the future.Let's talk about my opinion.

Firstly

, it will cause the economic

decrease

. Everyone have a job and wages. They use wages to let their life better and spend their wages on their holidays . If the

population

should pay for their

healthcare

provision in the future, the people will make a change of their lifes. The human beings will start saving their wages and their lifes quality will

decrease

. When they get wages, they will save wages in the bank untill the accident happend. They might never use these

money

untill they died. The cost on holiday and activities will

decrease

which will effort the economics.The GDP will

decrease

sharply which is bad for a country's economics. The change of public

healthcare

will change many things which is a bad trend for the people and country. Sceondly, the people will lose their confident during the sick time.

For example

, if a person had

cancer

. She needs to pay for her illeness. As we all know

cancer

is a very terrible disease which need a huge amount

money

for the treament. Most people will feel stressful. How about the the person who had

cancer

. She not only needs to worry about the

money

but

also

worry about her life. What a pitty !

Although

cancer

will reconver,they don't want spend the plenty of

money

on the disease. Because the

cancer

has a high percentage of death. Overall,I disagree the

population

should pay for their

healthcare

provision in the future.

This

is a unfair for eveyone. The disease will only happen on small percentage person, not everyone. So I think the most important things is to give the patient confident.

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