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Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past.Some people think changes have been positive by others believe they have been negative.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years,there has been a tremendous change in people's outlook towards their life.They
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 their own lives with new inventions and strategies and some people think that
this
 could bring negative impacts as well as the positives. In my essay, I will highlight both views and its possible impacts.
To begin
 with, there are several changes that have occurred in people's everyday lives like modern technology, fashion trends and personal choices.
Firstly
, the latest electronic gadgets like the washing machine and smartphones have replaced the work by hand and physical strength which enables them to finish their work earlier as possible.
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, wireless communication
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 reduced the emptiness between two distant people and makes them feel that they are under the same roof. As for the earlier times, people used to exchange letters to communicate with their loved ones residing far away from them.
Secondly
, the dressing sense and personal choices have become more and updated to the present generation it's quite less that they follow a traditional outfit and even tries to customise those using
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atest designs and patterns.At present,people are lucky enough to have too many choices regarding the subjects and careers and they are not forced to qualify in every
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.
For instance
,the government of various countries are introducing new and practical streams like artificial intelligence and robotics to the schools to build a bright and secure future for the children.
In addition
 to it, they follow certain diet charts,daily exercises and certain beauty hacks in order to maintain a better life. To conclude, the people around the globe are behind modernising themselves to live a better life and I strongly believe that the positive sides of
this
 trend outweigh the disadvantages.
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