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Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious problems and uses up the world's fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable that
air
travel
 causes pollution and uses a lot of fuel, but I disagree that
air
travel
 should be restricted. I believe that restricting
air
travel
 would solve some problems but would lead to many other problems. At a time when people all over the world worry about the decreasing level of fossil fuels and global warming, it is right to take action to save the planet Earth.
However
, to simply discourage flights is not the answer. International tourism has become the backbone of many economies of the world. Many countries are earning from tourism. Many people are employed in
this
 industry. Many businesses like hotels and leisure centres are dependent on tourists. So, if we discourage international tourism, it would create new and even worse problems. Many businesses would go broke and many people would be without jobs.
Air
 flight
also
 enables intercultural exchanges between countries. The advent of cheap airfare makes it possible for people the world over to
travel
 regularly, regardless of the purpose of the trip.
Therefore
, people have the opportunities to learn from different cultures and have a better understanding of countries they used to be unfamiliar with.
This
, in turn, enhances cultural communications between countries. It is true that
air
travel
 consumes oil, but other modes of transportation are
also
 causing pollution and using fuel. Discouraging private cars and encouraging people to use public transport could help save environmental resources in a big way.
Therefore
 it would be a very unpractical decision to restrict
air
travel
 at the cost of people's mobility, or worse, at the cost of the development of the economy. The technology could
also
 be used to produce more environmentally friendly and fuel-efficient engines. To conclude,
instead
 of restricting
air
travel
, we should develop a more efficient engine that produces more energy output with less fuel and fewer major
air
 pollutants. We should
also
 focus on limiting private vehicles and encouraging public transport.
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