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Some people say that the main environmental problem is a loss of particular species of animals and plants. Others say that there are more important environmental problems Discuss both views and give your opinion

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nvironmental problem is one of the most problems in modern society. Some people believe that particular species avoid environmental problems
such
 as trees or some animals. I totally agree with
this
 perspective. But, there are other significant problems for the
environment
.
For example
, some people do not recycle their garbages.
This
 essay will discuss what is the main problems of environmental problems. On the one hand, as we know, a lot of trees are good for
air
 pollution.
Thus
, people try to protect trees and mountains. In recent research shows, a small size room with smoke, around ten adult trees can change the
air
 condition of the room in a few days. Trees are not only good for
air
 but
also
 they prevent erosion when heavy rain or earthquake.
However
, still, deforestation is
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ssue
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issue
 because trees are very important for the
environment
.
On the other hand
, Unless people do recycle, it will lead to several environmental problems. The garbages which not recycle properly, these are just throughout everywhere even rivers, mountains or around people's houses. When I lived in Canada, there are only two options in garbage cans, recycle or garbages.
However
, some countries are very strict
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 recycling.
For example
, some people have to recycle for cans, glasses, plastics and papers. I believe that people doing recycle well can provide environmental problems. In conclusion, there are
much
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 reasons for
environment
 pollution. It can be loss of particular animals and plants
,
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 or people's bad habits. In my opinion, we should protect particular animals or plants
such
 as trees because they are protecting
air
 pollution.
In addition
, people have to try to protect the
environment
.
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