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The detailed description about crime will affect the people and cause many social resources. Some people say that the media should be strictly controlled. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays, the social media and news channel are proactive and they to disclose and expose everything in publically and
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etail description of the crime.
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 creates many problems in societies and communities.
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, some individuals think that these things should be censored. I personally believe that the media should be wise in selecting what should be published or hide from the public.
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 with, children and adolescent are immature they do not have a sense about what is right or what is wrong for them. When criminal and violent activities are shown on T.V or other social media which leaves bed impact on children minds.
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, young adults try to do those activities in future.
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, many countries are banning the Pub G game due to their violent activities in that game recent in the Pakistan a child took his friend’s life because in that these type of activities are happening.
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,the detailed reporting can be very helpful for the criminal in terms of update about reactions of law and order forces.
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, a terrorist attacked the Taj hotel in India, the media was cover and live broadcast it on T.V channels of every movement of the military which was a kind of help of those terrorists to locating the military positions. To conclude, the detail reporting could be to create bed illusion in children minds which will create more criminal.
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, reporting about the rime is showing to the public with some censors.
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