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In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

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It is true that in many countries, the amount of animal species or flora is decreasing. In
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 problem and propose effective solutions to address the issue. There are various reasons why greenery and
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 are decreasing in number.
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, climate change has some crucial effects on the environment. As a matter of
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 temperature is rising very rapidly which contributes to the melting of many continents.
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, the levels of water are increasing thereby killing a lot of greenery when it reaches the shores.
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, deforestation plays a key role in declining of
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 and flowers . The destruction of forests has become common in recent years because the consumption of wood and the construction of buildings are expanding very quickly .
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, a lot of species of
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 should abandon their native habitats to survive but many of them die out and become extinct. There are many steps that can be taken to address
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 issue . I believe that governments and nature protection organizations should institute strict laws against deforestation in some areas .
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, in Ukraine, it is illegal to deforest trees and export them to other parts of the world but unfortunately, there are many organizations that trade trees freely even if it is against the law. At the same time, hunting endangered
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 is becoming increasingly popular in some countries.
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, we lose a variety of
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 that contribute to the natural cycle.
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, there are a lot of influencers like Ilon Mask who are trying to inform society about endangered
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 and trees. In conclusion, there is a clear evidence that many factors could be a reason for decreasing the population of
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 and herbs.
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 problem will be progressive if not to take measures to address the issue
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task achievement
Ensure every main point is adequately supported with specific examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Try to provide a more comprehensive conclusion that summarizes your main points effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
The main reasons for the decline in animal and plant species were clearly identified and explained.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • urbanization
  • deforestation
  • agricultural expansion
  • pollution control
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable practices
  • overexploitation
  • invasive species
  • conservation
  • quarantine measures
  • eradication programs
  • public awareness campaigns
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • natural habitats
  • species decline
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