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Fast food is a part of life in many place. Some people think this has bad effects in lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.

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As people get busy with their daily works, they don't have any time and patience for making traditional foods. People’s dependence on fast
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 has increased drastically in the
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 decade. As per my opinion, it affects the lifestyle and health very badly.
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 of all, fast foods are mostly made up of fats and fatty oils. the trans fat in fast-
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 is proved to increase bad cholesterol levels in the blood.It is proved that fast
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 gives more calories than average
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 which in turn increases obesity. A person who eats fast
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 is more prone to heart diseases and diabetes as per Dubai Health authority’s findings.
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, many fitness coaches suggest having healthily balanced freshly cooked low-fat diets for fitness.
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, Traditional foods give us enough energy and good health. They are not as toxic as fast
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. Consider a youth who eats only natural and traditional
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, he will look healthier and bright than the one who eats fast
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. Fast
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 eaters can be identified by their look.
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, if a person looks odd-shaped and with an enormous amount of fat in his waist, he is surely a frequent consumer of fast
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. They cannot do their day-to-day activities on their own. They will look tired and sleepy. To conclude, there is no evidence that fast
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 can bring any good benefits to humans.
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, they deteriorate health and cause deadly diseases.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalence
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • culinary culture
  • wholesome meals
  • inherently
  • health consequences
  • nutritional options
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