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University education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Education
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ital role in our
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 and it will support
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ountry’s economy. Nowadays many countries offering free higher
education
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 for promoting
education
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 for culture and
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 encourage their citizens to get professional qualifications. I completely agree with
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bove statement.
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 with, there are many people who have
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otential to do something for their country but they cannot afford their university fees.
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, they study
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imple
education
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 or leave their studies.
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,
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ountry lost their
talent
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 who can do something for their country but due to expensive higher
education
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 pupils left their studies
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upport their family.
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, according to the survey of Cambridge University 40
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 students of Pakistan are not getting university
education
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 because of high fees.
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, due to
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ack of professional
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ountry’s economy suffer. The government have higher people from other countries on huge salaries.
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, many countries offering free educations and encourage their citizens to get quality of
education
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 and support and work for their countries.
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, some countries are offering special
trainings
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training
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 and universities degrees to international students to collect international
talent
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 and
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 give them job offers which give
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uge advantage to the authorities and individuals as well in term of
higher good
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talent
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 and handsome salaries.
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, China
offer
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 free medical
education
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 to international pupils and after completing
education
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 offer a good job as well. To conclude,
education
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mportant thing which is very helpful to boost economic growth and individuals
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 get many benefits from
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. A free educational program
are produce
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 more
talent
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 who are improving their reputation in the world.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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