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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather then buying them.

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Choosing a place to live in and whether to
rent
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 it or own it is a big decision to make. Many people prefer to own a
house
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 rather than living in a rented
apartment
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 while others choose to do exactly the opposite. I believe that owning a
house
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 has far more advantages than renting an
apartment
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. To commence with, people often
rent
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 a
house
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 because purchasing a property requires a great deal of money and the skyrocketing price in big cities makes it impossible for many to own a
house
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. These people naturally
rent
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 an
apartment
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. There are certain advantages to living in a rented
apartment
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.
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 of all, the person does not have to pay a huge sum of money at a time and does not need to pay housing taxes and bear the costs of maintenance.
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,
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 people can change the living place based on the location of their workplace and children’s school. The renovation of the
apartment
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 is the landlord’s responsibility and the tenants do not need to worry about it.
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, owning a
house
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 gives a sense of personal achievement that tenants cannot enjoy. A
house
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 is a permanent asset and with time its price increases. The landlord can
rent
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 the
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 and
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 can be a steady source of earning for him.
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, being the owner of a
house
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 means there is no one over the shoulder to watch what someone is doing and no sudden notice for evacuation.
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, we had to vacate our
apartment
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 all of a sudden at least thrice until we purchased our own
house
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 a decade earlier.
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 is some sort of freedom which only
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 owners enjoy.
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, the owner can construct and design the
house
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 the way he likes and enjoy open space, garden, and other facilities in the
house
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. To conclude, renting a flat has some benefits but the overall freedom and monetary compensations
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 owners enjoy are far significant, and
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 is why every tenant dreams to own a
house
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 someday.
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