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As housing is a basic need for people, government who can't afford it, to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary era, homelessness is a big problem which is faced by developing and underdeveloped countries, because lifestyle has dramatically changed from a couple of decades.
However
, according to some individuals, authorities should give houses to needy people without any cost; but , I will
further
 discuss my stance on both sides in the ensuing paragraph. To commence with, in the modern era
government
 has a lot of work to do for the country's economy.
For example
, the authority has to provide the infrastructure of roads, building, water, electricity and hospitals maybe it is more prominent rather than giving free home. If the
government
 will provide home without any cost ,
then
 it will affect on country's economy.
Moreover
, offering free accommodation to poor people is not a successful method. In
this
 global world,people have so many works to do to earn money.
Furthermore
, the official has several responsibilities for citizens.
For instance
, they have to pay salaries on time to employees.
Therefore
, if authorities give free houses to everyone, they will not do work hard and it creates unemployment and poverty in the country.
In contrast
, I think the
government
 should give free housing to whom people have income blow 50000 per year because they cannot afford accommodation in these salaries.
In addition
, if the
government
 gives free shelter to who are belonging poverty line, they will be able to educate their children from their income as well as savings. In termination, it is difficult for the
government
 to provide free housing to everyone; but, the authority should be built a new building and sold at lower prices for poor people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social safety net
  • Economic stability
  • Unemployment benefits
  • Financial security
  • Economic downturn
  • Poverty
  • Stimulate the economy
  • Job seeking
  • Dependency culture
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Government expenditure
  • Labor market
  • Fraud
  • Welfare abuse
  • Quality of life
  • Budget constraints
  • Economic strain
  • Public funds
  • Employment incentives
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