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“Prevention is better than Cure”. Researching and treating disease is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree.

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Taking precautionary measures is always better than curing a
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. It is rightly said that treatment and research is an expensive method to deal with any
disease
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. I completely agree that we ought to look for ways to prevent the
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, in my opinion,
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overnment of any economy tries to aware its citizens about how to prevent many chronic diseases, whereas citizens play a major role in the prevention of
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 diseases.
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, diabetes is one of the chronic
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 which is incurable and administrations spend
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ot of money for providing availability of medicines to their citizens, which is costly itself.
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, many campaigns are run to let people know about symptoms and
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 reasons. Due to these campaigns, people have started gaining knowledge and have started taking precautionary measures.
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, If we take the example of
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ecent scenario of COVID-19 pandemic, where administrations
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 are spending
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ot of money on research and development of its vaccination.
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, till the time vaccination would be available, contaminations from the
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 may increase.
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, governments request their citizens to follow the precautionary practices, which is indeed required as per the requirement.
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, there are many other ways that can be followed, so that one may not have to reach the stage of curative steps. One of them is following
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healthy practices.
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, doing regular exercise like yoga, eating healthy food are the basic precautionary steps to keep the diseases away. To recapitulate, a whole process is required to be followed for inventing medicines for
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disease
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, in my opinion, every individual should follow and
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 aware others about the practices as mentioned above to keep themselves and others fit and fine.
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