Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a ‘fat tax’ is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that unhealthy
food
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impact
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our
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lives
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negatively.
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why some people believe that the government should promote and apply taxes in
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unhealthy
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restaurants.
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, others argue that 'fat taxes' is actually useless.
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essay will discuss both of these views and will provide my own opinion. On the one hand, Applying taxes to
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unhealthy
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might have a significant contribution
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people' health and well-being.
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, it might
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reverse
the opening of new fast
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stores and the streaming of fast
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advertisements
in
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TV, as they might have
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funds and revenue available to spend.
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, people will not have enough stores
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to buy unhealthy
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and neither, cope with
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advertisements
that encourage them to buy junk
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.
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, the money obtained from the taxes could be used in the construction of new exercising areas.
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, it could be used for the creation of new programs to educate people about healthy
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lifestyle
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.
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, the 'fat taxes' approach might be useless and it has proven to be
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in some countries. Nowadays,
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junk
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restaurants earn a lot of money. Even if they are paying high taxes, they will still
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money to increase their profits.
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,
at
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the end,
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approach might not be effective enough.
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, taxing unhealthy
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does not guarantee that people will stop buying it. In fact, a recent study conducted in France showed that, even when there were more taxes in
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cigarettes
, people there were still smoking as often as before and in some case more than before.
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, approaches
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as public
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and
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programs might raise more awareness among
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society than taxing unhealthy
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. In conclusion,
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taxing unhealthy
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might have a
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effects
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in individuals and in
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society, it should not be given with great importance. I believe that there are better approaches than
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, giving more positives outcomes.
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