In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.

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Student life is without a doubt strenuous and mentally taxing. Due to

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few nations promote young people to pause and take a break, before they enter University. In

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essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument.

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with, every child has to work hard, put in extra hours, burn the

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oil to able to acquire amazing results in order to get into their dream university.

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, they make tremendous sacrifices in order to succeed. As a consequence, they decide to take a year off and choose to explore the world or utilise their time in chores. The advantage of doing so is that it will enable the child to gather knowledge from the real world.

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, he/she can make

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decision on what would they like to pursue at college based on their experience.

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, a year's break can result in numerous distractions.

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, the ability to earn money at

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a young age would lead to unwanted temptations.

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, since the child is not bound by commitment, they can spend it

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they want. Often times,

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would lead them to alcoholism and drugs.

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, they might be addicted to the act of earning money which would result in them not wanting to go back to University. In conclusion,

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the thought of enabling a tutee to take time off is Nobel, it must be regularised Universities. Some boundaries must be laid out so that the time spent during the break is used wisely and to it's fullest capacity.

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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.

Your opinion

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