Throughout history, people have dreamed of living in a perfect society but nobody has agreed on what an ideal society would look like. What do you think is the most important element needed to make a society perfect? How can the ideal society be achieved?

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different people imagine an ideal society for themselves but nobody has agreed on a certain level of standards for society to be called perfect. Many

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to discuss the standards to be recognised as an ideal nation. Free education should be the basic right of all the individuals in the 21st century. Equal opportunities have to be provided so that everyone can choose their own fate and career path. Racism which is still considered to be a dividing force among people should be eradicated and basic value's and manners should be taught to all the citizens.

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, I believe basic pay to all to afford food, shelter, clothing etc should be a norm in our current environment considering the increasing expenses. World leaders have to step up and develop different councils to promote world peace and value among human life. In my opinion, World peace and

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and basic rights to all will bring out the best in our society. We have to make sure that we do not forget our basic values and lesson given to us by our previous generation.

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