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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Parenting is bliss and a huge responsibility for any individual. In every stage of life, in
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 or another way, everyone is learning the parenting skills from supporting a friend or a family member in the initial time of their parenthood, to be a guardian of younger ones.
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,
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 can be proficient in
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 skill after becoming a parent of his/her own child as he/she must take a greater burden on their shoulders.
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, I believe that it would be very helpful for every young person to learn parenting during school life, but it would not be mandated for them to learn.
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, to be a good guardian,
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 has to have different skills
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 as caring, companionship, good listening, advising, compatibility and so on. These skills can be learnt from experiences and there are not set modules or school of thoughts that inherent
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 qualities in
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’s personality. In spite, schools can be a good medium to teach parenthood as it provides a cohesive environment to grasp and innate the above-mentioned qualities in
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’s personality.
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, it will break the notions of gender discrimination related to motherhood and not the parenthood. Apart from
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, many countries have initiated
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 parenting classes for the children ageing between 15 to 18 years. Japan, being a wonderful example of
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 initiative, has begun to take practical classes where children are being taught with models, theatre games and group exercises.
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 has shown a significant improvement in personality skills of
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 children as they became more responsible, caring, problem solver and a good friend.
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, it has reflected minimal negative connotations from individuals due to mischievous - behaviour, lack of maturity and willingness to take up
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 kind of learnings.
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, I would conclude
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 by reconfirming my opinion that learning parenting is good to have in school, but it shall not be mandated. Experience is a great teacher and
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 can better learn by experiencing it in the course of life and be a good parent.
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