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You are an alumnus (alumna) of a Bluegill University, registered in a volunteer program to conduct informal interviews with prospective students. Recently, an entrant has been assigned to you to have an interview. Write a letter to the entrant. In your letter: state your reason for writing briefly describe the interview and inform the entrant of a possibility to cancel it propose a convenient time for an interview

Dear Mr. Mohan, I am writing to inform you that your
interview
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 has been scheduled on Friday, December 8, 2023, with an alumna at Bluegill
University
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 for being a newcomer to the
University
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. I, Harini Venkatram, an alumna of Bluegill
University
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 will be conducting an informal
interview
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 with you to discuss its features and your aspirations.
This
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 session is primarily focused on getting to know prospective students of our
University
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 better and helping them explore vital career options.
Also
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, I can provide guidance on any pre-requisite completion before the class commencements.
Moreover
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, the
interview
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 is scheduled on a public holiday which will be on December 8, 2023.
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, there is a high possibility of cancelling the
interview
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 and rescheduling it to a different date.
Thus
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, I would like to propose a date that may work better for both of us. I am willing to postpone our meeting to a later week on Monday, December 13, 2023. I look forward to meeting you soon. Yours sincerely, Harini Venkatram

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single idea; the current structure merges different points in some paragraphs which can affect clarity and cohesion.
task achievement
Clarify the reason for writing at the beginning more precisely; it's to arrange the upcoming interview, not just inform about it.
coherence cohesion
Maintain consistent tense throughout the letter; there are shifts which could lead to confusion.
coherence cohesion
Refrain from introducing new topics or information, such as public holidays, without further elaboration or clear relevance to the task.
task achievement
The letter should explicitly state the purpose of the interview in relation to the role of an interviewer and what the entrant can expect.
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