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The global demand for oil and gas is increasing. Some believe that we should therefore encourage the exploitation of remote areas. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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The need for
oil
 and
gas
 is increasing worldwide.
Due to
this
 reason, certain people think that the remote areas should
also
 be dug for fuel. Even though it can be a remedy for the lack of fuels and can be a solution for economic problems, it poses
threat
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 to wildlife
along with
 the depletion of
the
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apply
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natural
resources
. On one hand, exploiting the remote areas where maybe more
oil
 and
gas
 can be found will help to tackle its shortage.
In other words
, because of the increase in urbanization more fuel is required to run industries and vehicles
thus
, the current sources are failing to meet the needs.
This
 leads to the demand for new sources.
Additionally
, it will
also
 be helpful for the economic development of
such
 nations.
For example
, under-developed countries like Africa can take full advantage of
this
 exploitation and rise economically. Still,there are many places in Africa which are untouched and full of
resources
 from where lots of
oil
 and
gas
 can be extracted.
On the other hand
, its disadvantage includes the destruction of the place’s flora and fauna. To elaborate,
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 places where the mining for fossil fuels takes place, a huge plot of land is taken up and a lot of heat and smoke is expelled which leads to the difficulty in the survival of species around. The second drawback of
this
 practice is that it causes the quick depletion of natural
resources
.
That is
, it takes thousands of years for the formation of
oil
 and
gas
 and if we exploit even the remote areas, after a few years there will not be any sources left to mine. In conclusion, the environmental risks do not outweigh the benefits of
economy
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 and the abundance of
resources
 that accrue from remote
oil
 and
gas
 exploitation. Admittedly, we require a lot of energy on
daily
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a daily
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 basis,
however
,there must be strict protocols to protect the environment by limiting the usage of
oil
 and
gas
.
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The essay provides a reasonable level of coherence and cohesion, with an introduction, body, and conclusion but the logical structure and support for main points are underdeveloped.
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The essay addresses the task to some extent by discussing the advantages and disadvantages of encouraging the exploitation of remote areas for oil and gas. However, the ideas are not fully developed, and more depth and clarity are needed.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exploitation
  • economic growth
  • infrastructure
  • underdeveloped areas
  • environmental cost
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • global warming
  • renewable energy sources
  • sustainable development
  • geopolitical issues
  • resource control
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