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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the Advantages and Disadvantages of this approach.

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There is no doubt the populations have increased significantly in all over the world. Some people think that it is necessary to grow genetically modified crops of
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 seed. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument. On one hand, there are some advantages of increasing GM crops,
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 as to fulfil everyone's need and to explore some new species.
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, if genetically modified crops can be grown.
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, the human will have enough
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 to sustain our life.
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, it is said that some scientists utilize their technology to make some new species, like to mix different plant's tissues together.
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, they make a new species.
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 can increase our type of
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 to make various choices for us.
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, we can build more
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 to fulfil the increasing populations.
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, there are some disadvantages of people turn to build up the genetically modified crops, like to damage the original genes which
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 bad to our health.
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, when scientists
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 the genes of
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,
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 means the original genes of
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 will be damaged.
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, some
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 cannot keep for a long period.
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, some reports said that genetically modified crops might not good for our health.
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 is because when we eat genetically modified crops, it would change our bodies system to drug resistance state.
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 means our bodies turn to reject some medicines which have an impact if we need treatment when we get the illness. In conclusion, to increase genetically modified crops which can help us have enough
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 and develop different kinds of
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.
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, there are some drawbacks, like
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 will damage the original genes of
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 which can lead our bodies turns to reject some medicines.
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