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`Nowadays, a lot of information about medical conditions and illnesses is freely available on the internet. Is this a good thing or a bad thing for most people? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

In the modern era,
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 huge amount of sources regarding health issues are posted by
people
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 on many websites. It is believed by some that
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 has positive impacts on
users
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life
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lives
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,
while
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 others have
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contradicted
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 view. I partly agree with
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 statement. In
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 shed light on both sides before a reasonable conclusion can
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drown
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drawn
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.
Firstly
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,
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some
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people
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in
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the
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favour of
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 online medical science because they assert that
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 makes their life easier.
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,
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 helps to provide
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the best
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 first-aid methods in some emergency cases because with the aid of free e-medical knowledge
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people
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, people
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 can save someone's life before the doctor's
arrangement
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arrival
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.
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,
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 is good for
short
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 time
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likewise
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likewise,
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if
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 individuals have any problem
at
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 the middle of the night and they
living
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 in
the remort
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remote
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 areas, where a doctor or other medical facilities are not available at that time
online
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 data can play a crucial role for short-term solutions. On the other side,
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it
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 is an irrefutable fact that without the medical professional taking any pills can be dangerous because them recent study showed that around 50% of
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suffering
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 from side effects of wrong medication in Canada.
In addition
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 to
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, many internet medical websites
run
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 by unprofessional citizens without the knowledge of medical science. which leads to
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unwanted results.
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,
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due
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 to the easy availability of medicines
material
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 folks avoid to concern doctors or pharmacists for
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apply
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small
issue
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issues
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 like pain or deep
cut
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cuts
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and
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 they use their own medication, but after some
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time,
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 these small problems become a huge disease like Cancer.
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, the 70% population in India has no medical coverage. So, they use
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 online knowledge to solve their health-related problem. Which sometimes has a negative impact that way
around
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as
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 India has a big number of heart
attack related
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attack-related
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 deaths.
To conclude
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, I would like to state that
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 has both positive and negative effects on society.
However
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, I believe that each coin has two sides. So, It,s
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 on
people
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 how they use
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 for their own benefits. Doctors cannot be replaced by free online medical instruction.

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Provide more specific and clear examples to support your main points. This will strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and sentence structure for clearer communication. This will help your writing flow better.
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You raised important points about the pros and cons of online medical information. This shows that you understand the topic well.
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Your use of personal experience and examples adds depth to your essay. Keep this up!
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