14. Is teaching people over 65 to use computers the best way to spend government money? To what extent do you agree?

When it comes to education, one of
m
Add an article
the
show examples
ost fundamental need is already boosted greatly by IT. Almost all teachers, either college professors or high school tutors, are accustomed to prepare
c
Add an article
the
show examples
lass and do
p
Add an article
a
the
show examples
resentation with software.
Besides
, after class,
such
tools
also
guide students on their homework effectively. It is not only saving time but
also
supplying extra animated effect to promote class performance. As benefits brought by sophisticated educational software suite,
g
Add an article
the
show examples
overnment should equip them for public colleges. Health resource development in some degree relies on IT more than education does. Nowadays, blood check can be done soon and accurately with
computer
assistance
instead
of the time-consuming and error-prone process in old times, by
d
Add an article
a
the
show examples
octor using microscope manually. Meanwhile, many prior
giant
Change to a plural noun
giants
show examples
and space-occupying medical instruments are minimized to a portable size even can be taken
under
Correct your spelling
underarm
show examples
a
Add an article
the
show examples
rm, which
bring
Change the verb form
brings
show examples
tremendous convenience to
p
Add an article
the
show examples
ublic. Obviously, IT no doubt would benefit
p
Add an article
the
show examples
ublic more if
g
Add an article
the
show examples
overnment spent more money on
this
field.
Finally
, IT
also
exerts
p
Add an article
a
show examples
ositive influence
to
Verify preposition usage
on
show examples
public transportation. Both flights landing on local airport and subway operation are scheduled by
computer
, which
need
Change the verb form
needs
show examples
high performance and must gratify higher safety requirement. In Singapore,
for instance
, even
t
Add an article
the
show examples
raffic light cycle is not fixed but responses to variation of
Add a hyphen
real-time
show examples
r
Add an article
the
a
show examples
eal time traffic situation on road, under
computer
monitoring and control.
This
is
also
a trend to develop related
computer
technology
to resolve
h
Add an article
the
show examples
eavy traffic issue in big cities. It concludes that spending money on developing or buying
computer
technology
is valuable for basic needs. Despite usually transforming
technology
to practice requires buffer time. Whereas if a government really has not resolved basic needs, like eating, living place, etc., just put
computer
technology
aside
firstly
.
Submitted by hnamca on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive function
  • Digital divide
  • Lifelong learning
  • Cognitive decline
  • Digital inclusion
  • Autonomy
  • Reliance
  • Healthcare allocation
  • Elderly empowerment
  • Budget constraints
  • Intergenerational connections
  • Social connectivity
  • Online services
  • Technological literacy
  • Cost-effectiveness
What to do next:
Look at other essays: