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Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #space #exploration #waste #governments #benefit #nation
Space
 exploration offers us the chance to learn
a great deal of
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a lot of
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 new things.
However
, as it costs an exorbitant amount, we need to decide the best way to allocate our
resources
. I would argue that there are more pressing
problems
 that need addressing but that there may be other ways for us to continue funding
space
 exploration. There are a number of
problems
 which are still affecting the world today. Despite incredible advancements in science and
technology
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 there are still billions of people who struggle with health, education, food and water, shelter and security. Many people suggest that we lack the
resources
 to resolve these
problems
 and
therefore
 should not waste billions of dollars on exploring
space
.
On the other hand
, there is much to be learnt from the exploration of
space
. There is the possibility of discovering new materials and energy sources. Some scientists even suggest that we may be able to colonize other planets or make contact with other life forms. Given that the universe is so vast, it does not make sense to only focus on our planet. One possibility of continuing to explore the universe while improving the quality of life on earth is through greater cooperation between countries.
For example
, a global
space
 agency could be founded which allows
for
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countries to share their
resources
.
This
 would enable countries to allocate funds more effectively and would avoid the duplication of research. In
conclusion
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although
 it seems immoral to spend money to explore
space
instead
 of addressing global
problems
, it would be ignorant to turn our back on
space
. One solution would be to better share our
resources
 in order to benefit mankind
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  • technological advancements
  • foster
  • international cooperation
  • inspire
  • engage
  • boost the economy
  • long-term benefits
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