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You have seen a job advertised in the newspaper. You want to apply for the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter • provide information about yourself • give details of your previous work experience • say why the company should consider you for the job

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to apply for the vacant job availaible as a assistant manager in your restaurant. My name is Roopkamal and I moved here six months ago from the United Kingdom . Currently, I am pursuing
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years
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three-year
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 master's degree in Business Management at the University of Waterloo ,Canada.
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this
 , I am residing close to your restaurant. I have three
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work
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 experience as a Shift Manager at
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fast food
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 restaurant . I am certified as a best people manager in my previous work experience .
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, I am expert in making schedules and follow up on accurate procedures regarding food safe. I am
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available
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weekend
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as well as
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weekday
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 from 3 pm to 10 pm .
According to
 your job advertisements , my full-time availaibility meet your needs .I hope I
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fulfil
 all your requirements
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job
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. I am really excited to be a part of your team. I am looking forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Roopkamal.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that all sentences and phrases are grammatically coherent for a smoother flow.
Task Achievement
Consider briefly mentioning how your skills can specifically benefit the company to strengthen the persuasion of your application.
Coherence & Cohesion
Good structure and clear division of paragraphs, each focusing on a specific point.
Task Achievement
Complete and relevant details about self, work experience, and availability.
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