In many countries paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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the mode of money transaction is become digital using
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obile
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and it is no more uncommon in most of the countries. There are way more benefits of
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oney transfer using
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ellular app which includes convenience and swiftness.
However
, there is one major potential drawback associated with
this
method
of
payment
is cyber theft. Undoubtedly, there are numerous advantages of funds transfer using mobile apps and
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ransaction is tremendously popular in most of the regions in the world.
Firstly
, convenience is one of the major
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of
this
particular
method
in which people can paying online bills or buy anything online by tapping
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ew clicks on
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obile screen.
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opulation is using
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obile app
for instance
Amazon, eBay to order things and pay online through these applications.
Secondly
, online
payment
using smartphone
application
is considered rapid comparing to any other
method
.
Furthermore
, it saves a lot of time and individuals do not need to visit any credit or debit card machines for
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making
payment
.
Nonetheless
, apart from the upsides of mobile
application
payment
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there are some potential risks involved with
this
. The enormous drawback is the cyber theft associated with
this
mode of
payment
because it is more vulnerable that hacker can get access to the mobile phone using social media applications or installed unauthorized apps. After that
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he would be able to acquire confidential credentials of one’s online bank account and steals
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earn
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money.
Although
,
this
can be resolved or avoided by educating mobile app user to not click on any unnecessary link or do not install any unauthorized
application
on their smartphone. In conclusion, online
payment
using mobile phone applications is
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ost swift and convenient
method
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Nevertheless
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associated with
this
way of
payment
which can minimize or eliminate by proper guidance and making system more reliable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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