The first man to walk on the moon claimed it was a step forward for mankind. However, it has made little difference in most people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Ever since Neil Armstrong set foot on the surface of the moon, it has been a subject of debate amongst people with some claiming that
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was one of the biggest progressions in the history for humans whereas some argue
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. In my opinion, even though it is a huge achievement for humanity and the subject of space science, it barely does anything to improve an individual’s life
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making it less significant for a regular person. From July 20, 1969, when Neil Armstrong walked on the biggest star within the galaxy of the earth, all the entities associated with international space research have believed in the impossible. The ability to not only travel so far into the galaxy but being able to land, observe and return back safely has been a
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accomplishment.
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proves how much science and technology has improved over time and what all it is capable of.
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advancement has highlighted the commendable growth in the skills of humans.
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betterments in the field of aerospace technology doesn’t do much for the average person. In fact, it does not do much for anyone except for the ones directly associated with it in one way or the other. With bigger challenges in day to day life ranging from the hardships faced for acquiring the basic necessities to securing a stable lifestyle, a common man cannot do much with
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ulfilment of a space odyssey except to be amazed. It does not relate to one’s growth individually
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, not making much of a difference.
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it remains one of the biggest enhancements in the potential of the scientists and researchers involved with planetary-science, it does not help the population apart from them.
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I believe it does not make much of a difference.
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