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Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Today festival celebration has become a way of enjoyment and day off from work for most of the people,
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rue message behind the traditional and religious celebration
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pcoming paragraphs, I will discuss my opinion in detail. To start with, traditional and religious festivals were being started by our religious guru and forefather to teach traditional and religious values.
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, to spread the message of religion so that people could benefit from them and make their lives better but today’s society has totally deviated from
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people visit religious places with their friends and family members to show their respect for their religion or just to complete a ritual and
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 in many cases for the sake of enjoyment only.
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the way these celebrations were being held has totally changed. To illustrate, People start sending messages and teaching related to these religious festivals well in advance but people who read and apply them in their lives can be counted on fingers.
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, buying new clothes, shopping and expensive electronic gadgets during the days of festivals has been attached by people with festival celebration
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 society has gone far away from the real objective of these cultural and religious events. To conclude, though events related to religion and culture gives us an opportunity to learn old values, in the modern world have totally become a time of fun and enjoyment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commercialization
  • Globalization
  • Cultural dilution
  • Traditional values
  • Secularization
  • Festivity
  • Heritage
  • Individualism vs. collectivism
  • Consumer culture
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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