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Some people who go to work abroad for a period of time take their family with them. Does it have more advantages than disadvantages for the individual and their family?

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The opportunities to work abroad are more today than they were in the past so while working in a foreign country, some individuals take their family with them.
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 situation has both merits as well as demerits but the pros outweigh the cons which shall be discussed in
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 essay.
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 with, the most obvious benefit of going abroad to work along with family is that, individuals have more bonding with family and so the family relationship is not weakened by distance.
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, newly married couples may face problems in their relationship as one or both of them cannot endure the long-term separation.
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 may eventually lead to divorce which can be avoided by going abroad to work along with family. Another point to consider is that having a family company may help the individual to avoid the feeling of loneliness and
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 help him or her to adjust to the new country much easier.
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, people who feel homesick and lonely when they go alone cannot adjust to the foreign country and
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 return home, thereby missing the golden opportunity of working abroad. The disadvantage,
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, is that living with family members abroad means more expenses.
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, a single person can share a room with someone in the initial stages but a complete family needs a proper house and so it increases expenses. What is more, all the members may
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 face the stress of adaptation to alien surroundings as they might have a cultural shock. To conclude, there are some advantages and disadvantages in any choice of
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 issue and the people should decide according to his or her specific circumstances. If there are financial constraints,
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 it is better to go alone
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.
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, the family should be called as early as possible.
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