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Some feel that it is a waste of time to plan for the future and it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#feel #waste #time #plan #future #focus
In
this
 modern era, future planning is essential in order to achieve excellent success. Few people think that we have to focus on the current situation
instead
 of wasting
time
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lanning of the future.
This
 essay will discuss why proper planning for future goal is superior.
To begin
 with, there are numerous merits
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 it.
Firstly
, everything can
be manage
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 by us easily and it can
also
 save our golden
time
.
Secondly
, people can easily focus on their target without any unnecessary hurdle and it is very profitable for them.
For example
, in some developed countries
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people are doing really good because they are planning everything in advance. Mainly, without
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we can not able to live stable life-style. If the government will encourage everyone for
this
then
 it will directly affect on nation's progress ratio.
On the contrary
, some people
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have
 a negative mentality and they
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 on the present. Because they are not aware of the
important
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 of planning skill and it has a few drawbacks. Apart from
this
, it
also
 creates a negative impact on their personality and they can not get rapid grown in
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hort
time
. Due to
this
 reason, many schools are providing free classes on
this
 topic so students can learn it from their childhood. To conclude,
this
 essay discussed why planning for the
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time
 is necessary and how it works positively. I have completely agreed with it. Because it is beneficial for society as well as for the country.
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