smacking children is the best way to make them disciplent while studying. discuss your views and do you think its right?

A range of people
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that hitting children or physically abusing them is the best way to make them
disciplent
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discipline
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or help them concentrate only on studies.
On the other hand
, there are people who consider
this
to be illegal and irrelevant. In
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essay, I will present my viewpoints on the topic that smacking children is the best way to make children
disciplent
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discipline
while studying. I believe that
physica
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physical
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;l abusing someone just for the sake of study is obviously intolerable as
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cause emotional, mental and physical tension in a child and they may grow up with a thought that hitting or abusing someone is the best way for everyone to study.
This
leads to a criminal mindset which is not only wrong for the person who is doing it or the person who is experiencing it but
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wrong for the whole generation.
this
is evident from the points that smacking children to make them more
disciplent
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discipline
disciplined
while studying is not right and should not be continued.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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