Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

These days,
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overnment is becoming more
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versatile
in terms of investing in different sectors
such
as sports. While many opine that the
government
should support the sports industry by offering them the requisite funding to become more successful on the international soil others oppose
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opinion that
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should be spent on the betterment of
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eneral public. I completely agree with the thought of encouragement of the sports industry by the
government
and my reason can be seen in the below paragraphs. The
first
reason is that it can bring pride to the nation at an international level. To elaborate, by
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sufficient monetary support to the sports industry we can ensure that our players are well trained as per the current market and
subsequently
can perform their best in the international tournaments.
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, with the help of
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overnment's money, the sports organizations can appoint the best coaches for the players and thereby, making the play with the best techniques. Another benefit is that it can attract a large
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of international sponsorship opportunities.
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, if our players will become popular worldwide, they can attract many foreign brands to invest in them. To exemplify, the
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football player Ronald is the brand
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ambassador
of more than 1000 international brands and
therefore
has become a gateway of foreign currency for its country. To conclude, I completely, concur with the view that sports
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as crucial as education, healthcare, tourism sector for the development of an economy and the
government
should provide its full support for
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this
segment grow.
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