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Some people think zoos should be illegal. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people argue that zoos should be considered unlawful. No animal or bird is happy living in a cage, they deserve freedom like us. In my opinion, it will be a great decision to declare it illegal and to send all wild animals and birds into their natural habitat. Undoubtedly, earlier zoos are a great place to visit, but with so many advancements in technology, we can learn and see even endangered species for wildlife sitting at our home.
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, you can open youtube and see million of videos about all kinds of animals. So now it makes no sense for any
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 place to exist in
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 world.
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, every now and
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 we hear news about animals dying in zoos because of some illness or poor conditions. Since not many people visit zoos now, they do not have enough money to provide food to these wild creatures and make their living conditions much worse. In a report published in 2019, it is claimed that every year at least 5 animals are dying due to unavailability of proper nutrition and various diseases.
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, they do not belong here, we call them wild animals for a reason as they belong in the wild.
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, we should think about opening more wildlife centuries to support and protect them and take some strict actions against
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 ill-treatment in the zoos.
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, we all should support
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 cause as we are aware of how difficult is to live in
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 harsh conditions.
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, caretakers in the zoos neglect their health, give them less food which in turn makes them weak and vulnerable. In conclusions, it is clear that in today's world zoos are no less than a punishment for our wildlife. Everyone deserves freedom in their life, many of us
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 have heard about many accidents in the zoos,
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, animals attacking their caretakers.
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 is because their mental and emotional condition has worsened over the years.
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